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Objects in Mirror are Closer than they Appear


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  I hated you; I loved you
I lay in bed with my eyes clamped shut
You left me here, but with what?
How could I let this love turn into hate?
I put you above even all my mistakes!


You tossed me aside, you gave me away
You lied to me daily without a word to say
How could I listen to all of your lies?
And now I just ask how come and why?


You could be standing right at my feet
And I would fall limp caught in defeat
How could I let you win over strength?
My heart's little wire only has so much length


Objects in mirrors can be so far away
But the truth of the mirror is what makes it okay
You can sit on the edge of a thousand foot cliff
And not be afraid, but just a bit stiff

People are like a tricky car mirror
The closer they get, the better it's clearer
But if you get too close they'll shatter the lies
So I'd advise you be careful and wise

You don't want to end up like that car over there
Yes, the one that is broken and beyond repair
Because people are like that, they can lie, too
They're a little be snarky and tad bit askew

Always be cautious and always be alert
You don't want to be broken or even hurt
'Cause it only takes a second and only a flash
For your life to shatter and to end in a crash!


I haven't written anything in a while... o.o This took me about...20 mins to whip up. I always wanted to write a poem based on this idea. Although the point of this poem is kinda dumb since I honestly just started to write and didn't stop. It might be messy and not make any sense, but to me it does and that is all that matters. xD

Anyway, 0o; Hope you guys like it? 8D

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DeceitOfTheMind Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is gorgeous! :love: :wow:
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Daw ;; thank you >.<
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Lacriyme Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, I really like it :) Lovely writing as usual, and it's a great idea.
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Dawww why thank you :3
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice. I like this idea. :)
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I really like this. :)
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
R-really? Gosh that makes me so happy xD ^^ YAY!
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Chitsu-chan Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, something this great in 20 minutes?! It takes me days to come up with something even half this good.... ^///////^
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
>.<; I dunno. I saw a poem and decided to write one and this is what I got. haha ^^

Thanks. I am soo glad you like it!
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Chitsu-chan Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course! ♥
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KuraiKaNinja Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Student General Artist
ahhhh you wrote something!!! :glomp:
it's beautiful, dear! there are so many emotions and feelings packed into this with so much meaning that it's practically tangible~
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Aww wow thank you <333 Gosh that means a lot to me. I thought it was going to suck...so I dunno xD Thank youuu!
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KuraiKaNinja Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Student General Artist
no problem :heart: and I really don't think anything you do could suck
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
;; aww <3 Gosh you make me blush >.< Thank you!
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KuraiKaNinja Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Student General Artist
mission accomplished :iconthumbupplz:
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xXDarkSideCookiesXx Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
This poem is so true and in the beginning so raw, it's beautiful. :iconawplz:
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Aww thanks! <33 Yea, I wasn't sure what I was aiming for in this poem. xD Just kinda went for it. Haha
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xXDarkSideCookiesXx Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
^^ hehehe I understand, thats what happens with me too. Words just bleed onto the page, but they never turn out as amazing as yours do.
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I bet your's are better >.<
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xXDarkSideCookiesXx Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
In all honesty they truly are not by far.
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Well, I think my writing sucks xD I mean, I know it isn't that bad, but I still complain. I bet your's is actually really good!
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xXDarkSideCookiesXx Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
No way! Your writing is the opposite of suckish, just look at all the comments and +favs. I love reading you work, mine is like a child's compared to yours.
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
;^; Well, I started writing like..6 years ago and somehow I posted one of my crappy fics here and someone liked it xD It will happen to you one day, too. :3 It doesn't mean you're not good, it just means no one has discovered you.
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cutewitch1 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
:iconcryforeverplz: this poem... I don't even know what words to use, but for lack of better words, it's beautiful :iconweepsplz:
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Awww wow ;; thank you thank you <333333333 *clings to you*
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cutewitch1 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
your welcome!!! I'll think of this as a birthday present, even though I know it's not ^^'
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
For your birthday?
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cutewitch1 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
well, yeah, I like deep poems^^
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
^^ Yea, me too!
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cutewitch1 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
xD you make me smile. Ily~
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012   Writer
great work :heart:
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh thank you so very much! <3
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teliiii Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow...this is...amazing Demi! Great job!
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Daww thank you! :3 *huggles*
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CherryCartoons Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Student General Artist
Very emotional and beautiful! Well done! :heart:
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks a bunch! <3
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CherryCartoons Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome~!! <3
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dadona777 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
pretty ;;
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Sasurealian Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Awwww thank you, Denise!
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dadona777 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
xD
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